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Post by Hiruko Koudo on Mar 27, 2012 1:00:02 GMT -1
Hey guys! Thought I'd let you all know that I am planning to write a prequel to Hiruko's life before Tialka. I thought it would be a good idea because Hiruko's character in Tialka is based upon his experiences in his previous homeworld. Also, it allows me to get to know Hiruko more (if that makes sense ). It's going to revolve a lot around Hiruko and Hayashi and how they came to be rivals (though not quite enemies) and will introduce Koatia near the end to sum up how they became enemies. I'm really excited because I have introduced a handful of new characters that I have already fully imagined. I'm planning out the chapters and the story seems to work well, there's a lot happening but there is also a lot of the culture and society of the Torakans which should be interesting. This will very likely be just a private story and I am not really planning to get it published or anything so when I say novel, don't be fooled into thinking that I am writing a proper book I just thought it would be fun to document Hiruko's (and Hayashi's) background story as a lot happens. Also, it will explain a lot more things for the Tialka story such as the events the occur between Hayashi and Hiruko, how Koatia and Hiruko became enemies and also, the story behind Hiruko's feral side where he transforms into a more wild version of himself as some of you may have noticed in some posts. The 'feral form' as I call it plays a massive part in the story and is generally the focus of the plot. Hope to be starting the writing soon once I have all the chapters and characters worked out
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Post by Seirei Hisakata on Mar 28, 2012 12:56:20 GMT -1
Looking forward to reading it
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Post by Mira-Neiva Fadiele-Koudo on Mar 28, 2012 13:48:19 GMT -1
Ooooh, I like the sound of this (:
Tip: There's a site called FictionPress where you can publish stories on the internet for free, and they automatically copyright it for you. Whenever you upload it, you can just give us the link for it so we can read it (:
Obviously you don't have to do this, I just thought I'd suggest it haha
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Post by Hiruko Koudo on Mar 28, 2012 15:04:20 GMT -1
Hehe that sounds cool But need to start writing xD I've now planned out the 24 chapters (seems like a lot lol) and I LOVE the story. It's given a nice background to Hiruko and Hayashi and it goes from their beginning all the way up until Hiruko leaves to find a new home world (though when I say beginning, the first chapter is sort of an introduction to them as children - the rest of the story is focused on an 18-year-old Hiruko and a 20-year-old Hayashi). The ending is quite sad actually. Tis probably gonna make my cry coming to write it. Bleh I am rambling when I should be writing
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Post by Mira-Neiva Fadiele-Koudo on Apr 13, 2012 19:35:47 GMT -1
You got any updates for us? I was wondering how you're getting on (:
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Post by Hiruko Koudo on Apr 19, 2012 9:31:01 GMT -1
At the moment, I have started writing the first draft It's a page and a bit long at the moment xD So not very far. I really struggle with starting novels but once I'm into it, it should progress a lot faster
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Post by Hiruko Koudo on May 2, 2012 9:20:11 GMT -1
More updates!
I am now soaring through the first chapter, got quite a couple of pages already. Once I finish the first chapter, I will upload it to FictionPress and you can all read it there. I will upload each chapter as they come. Remember they are only first drafts though so the writing won't be totally perfect!
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Post by Mira-Neiva Fadiele-Koudo on May 6, 2012 19:05:59 GMT -1
Glad to hear that you're doing well with it Have you thought of a title yet? Or are we going to have to wait until you've uploaded to FictionPress?
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Post by Hiruko Koudo on May 7, 2012 4:43:01 GMT -1
Decided to go with 'Sons of the Wild since a) I like that title and b) it was on my list and one of you also suggested it as well. The first chapter is now up! Posted a link on the Tialka Tribe Facebook page but here it is again: www.fictionpress.com/s/3020241/1/Sons_of_the_Wild
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Post by Seirei Hisakata on May 7, 2012 21:56:47 GMT -1
Despite needing a little editing - i know it's a first draft - I really enjoyed finding out about Lukoto. There's a thing my english tutor talks about with charactisation. To let a reader find out about a character, they can either show or tell, but the best authors do both. I found this with Lukoto, especially when you can tell he's holding something back towards the end of the chapter. Looking forward to reading more Chebs =]
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Post by Hiruko Koudo on May 23, 2012 14:13:04 GMT -1
The second chapter of 'Sons of the Wild' is up. Feel free to review and constructively criticise. I don't mind criticism as it only helps me to improve. If you guys wouldn't mind, please could you give me feedback on my writing during the sparring sessions. These kind of sequences can sometimes be difficult to describe so I'd love your input and if you could understand it okay. I suppose when I read it, I can understand it fully but I guess that because I already have it imagined in my mind. I hope you enjoy it (The Koudo brothers' rivalry should really become evident here and is beginning to manifest).
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Post by Seirei Hisakata on May 26, 2012 16:19:39 GMT -1
The only improvements I think you can make are: > Bigger paragraphs. All the tiny paragraphs gave me a bit of a headache when I was scrolling down, so maybe not so many gaps in between such short sections? Except for the bits with pure dialogue, cos then gaps are needed. Maybe they look longer on Word than they do on FF, I don't know. > Just going through and proof reading sentences. There aren't any grammatical mistakes, it's just some of the sentences sound a little awkward. Just going through and making them more complex with some commas and replacing their names with pronouns every now and then would make it more fluid I think. Apart from those tiny things I enjoyed seeing the rivalry between Hiruko and Hayashi, especially Hayashi's temper coming through. And don't worry, I could understand what was going on in the combat bits.
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Post by Hiruko Koudo on May 26, 2012 17:11:05 GMT -1
Coolies thanks for the advice The tiny paragraphs issue, have you tried changing the option on FictionPress? Because on the site, the sentences are stretched out across the screen whereas on my document, they're nice and fat and chunky ^^ And as for the fluidity, yeah I know At the moment, I am kinda just putting it all down so I need to come back to the writing when I have finished. Not that I'm neglecting it but I find that in the first draft, if I put too much time into making the sentence look great and not concentrating on the actual story, it diverts my attention away from the narrative. So yeah, punctuation and stuff is on my list of 'things to do' but isn't really a necessity at the moment.
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